Hi Terri,
I know I'm late in responding to this - but it feels as fresh now as it did
when I first read it! (I love the way it follows its own logic, the way it
works with a simple verbal pattern and patter. "What I love" & "What I hate"
are delightfully innocent and entertaining - yet the whole poem allows you
to introduce very complex images! Great!)
Part of me wants it to work its way all the way round a little more
completely so it ends as it begins with some reference to fingers or spines
as well as books... (but maybe I'm asking for too much!)
Part of me's also reminded of a chant. I think I've heard such a poem - that
ends where it starts - being called an amulet...
I like it.
Bob
>From: alderoak <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New: Exercise #1
>Date: Sat, 22 Feb 2003 21:45:45 -0000
>
>Exercise #1
>
>What I love about books
>is running my fingers up and down their smoothly printed spines.
>What I hate about spines
>is the slippery soft-centredness of intervertebral discs.
>What I love about discs
>is snapping the cellophane on a pristine jewel-case.
>What I hate about jewel-cases
>is that elusive fingernail of grey fluff in each velvet corner.
>What I love about corners
>is pebble-dash, cannoned by random shopping trolleys exposing the bricks.
>What I hate about bricks
>is the hackneyed toppling of wobbly rainbow alphabets.
>What I love about alphabets
>is the infinite creativity of the human voice distilled to a spatter of
>codes in a book.
>What I hate about books…
>
>
>Terri )O(
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