Hi Sue,
I understand your meaning a lot more now you've explained. Thanks.
bw
James
>From: Sue Scalf <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Descendant, slightly revised (James)
>Date: Mon, 3 Mar 2003 11:42:09 EST
>
><< Just read the revision. Great stuff. The images very intense. A little
> concern at the confluence of a thousand years, cavemen and Esau and
>Isaac.
> The historical schemata seems a little out although I understand your
>usage
> at each stage they don't hang together as a whole for me and spoils the
> unity of the poem just a tad.
> bw
> James >>
>I consulted an authority on these types of artifacts, and he saw the ax and
>said it was probably 3,000 years old. How long it lay hidden in that cave
>is
>just a guess, but 1,000 years seemed reasonable. There was something so
>profoundly powerful about the situation when my father gave it to me that I
>was reminded of the Old Testament and the passing of the blessing from
>father
>to son. I said "silent for once" because my dad had been a salesman and a
>world traveler, and he absolutely never stopped talking. It was difficult
>to
>talk to him because he liked to "hold forth." Plus, he couldn't hear
>anyway.
> (smile) Thanks for your comments. Sue
>Rethinking this, I may delete or change the line about "silent for once"
>since it is not that important to this particular poem. It would work in a
>collection because the reader would know what I mean, but for now I just
>need
>to deal with this poem.
>Arthritic knuckles are very large, and I think of cavemen as having large
>knuckled hands. Three thousand years old would not make the original owner
>a
>caveman, but certainly very primitive. Thanks for making me think a bit
>more. Sue
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