This is fine Colin, a capture of one of those moments when we unify with our
surroundings. I think the inversions of 'so far did they seem' and 'in
stillness stayed' sits awkwardly with the syntax of the rest of the
poem.Regards Arthur.
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From: "Colin dewar" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Monday, March 03, 2003 8:07 PM
Subject: next sub up on the mat/lochan
> Dubh Lochan
>
> Pausing by the black lochan
> I saw the world within,
> lichen on granite like peeling skin,
> dried grass over sphagnum,
> lizard and adder caught in a game.
> Those rocks were smooth,
> immarcesible as diamond,
> hills weightless where they lay.
>
> I had thought I could not reach them
> so far did they seem,
> yet knew them then
> as the world was dreamt in me,
> in stillness stayed
> as water showed the night
> and stars floated
> on quiet glass
> drawn from the abyss.
>
>
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