Hi C,
Thanks for comment. Yes, it's a real balancing act and I haven't gotten a
sufficiently comfortable relationship with this character yet to know the
right balance by instinct. I'll keep working on him, as he seems to be my
'serial character'.
Cheers and thanks,
Frank
The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
>This one doesn't work as well for me as many of your others, Frank, though
>I
>think, in essence, it's a goodun. It's because I get the feeling that the
>narrator's translating himself too much (though I'm not sure that's what's
>actually happening). Can you cut back a bit? There's some lovely stuff
>here
>that's extremely accessible - saving moneys - lovely. I think it's a fine
>balancing act but the odd snip here and there to make it slightly less work
>for the reader would be interesting to see. What do you think?
>bw
>christina
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