Hi gary,
I just love the title and the idea it conveys.
In terms of the poem itself, the middle stanza needs an 'is' in the opening
line I think. It's absence makes the S a little too different structurally
or some such, and I find it a touch distracting. (poor me, LOL).
Cheers,
Frank
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>The Secure Selection of Colors
>
>(orange alert a lighter shade of brown)
>
>Tangerine is too red,
>a reminder of the height of the Cold War
>when apocalypse loomed
>as large as a Texas ruby grapefruit
>ninety miles from the coast.
>
>Peach too pale
>to hold the fear we feel;
>beet too blood dark
>to allow us to continue our lives
>as if nothing had happened
>for they've won if we don't
> go on
>as if nothing has happened.
>
>Pumpkin is as American
>as apple pie, home-grown,
> honest,
>if we ignore the nagging doubt
>we squashed the pumpkin-eaters
>and no longer can afford green peppers
>let alone yellow.
>
>(orange fades to gray)
>
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