In a message dated 02/22/2003 8:12:51 AM Central Standard Time,
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<< This is a good poem. It would be made much better by finishing at stanza 5
after which you gild the lily too much I think and start becoming over
sentimental and begin to repeat.
>> I think you are right. The last two stanzas could be another poem
entirely. I don't agree that they are sentimental per se, but they may seem
so in the context. I will save them for another poem later. Sue
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