Gary,
I have made some amendments that are just suggestions. You don't have to
follow them. Original version below.
I like your use of colours to reflect psychic states. I have seen you do
this before.
Colin
----- Original Message -----
From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, February 20, 2003 10:25 PM
Subject: The Secure Selection of Colors
The Secure Selection of Colors
(orange alert a lighter shade of brown)
Tangerine is too red,
a reminder of the Cold War
when apocalypse loomed
as large as a ruby grapefruit
ninety miles from the coast............(refers to the Cuban missile crisis I
assume?)
Peach too pale
to hold the fear we feel;
beet blood too dark
to let us live.........................................(briefer)
as if nothing had happened
for they've won if we don't
go on
as if nothing has happened.
Pumpkin is American.............................(see below)
as apple pie, home-grown,
honest,
if we ignore the nagging doubt
we squashed the pumpkin-eaters
and no longer can afford green peppers
let alone yellow.
(orange fades to gray)
2
.............................("as" makes it too like a tongue-twister once
all the "a's" and"s's" have accummulated in L1and 2, to my ear but I am not
happy with my suggestion either and maybe it needs a third way)
..........................................................
The Secure Selection of Colors
(orange alert a lighter shade of brown)
Tangerine is too red,
a reminder of the height of the Cold War
when apocalypse loomed
as large as a Texas ruby grapefruit
ninety miles from the coast.
Peach too pale
to hold the fear we feel;
beet too blood dark
to allow us to continue our lives
as if nothing had happened
for they've won if we don't
go on
as if nothing has happened.
Pumpkin is as American
as apple pie, home-grown,
honest,
if we ignore the nagging doubt
we squashed the pumpkin-eaters
and no longer can afford green peppers
let alone yellow.
(orange fades to gray)
Feb CE Chaffin, Celebrations and Blessings at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html --- Writer's Hood at
http://www.writershood.com/... Poets for Peace.... ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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