Thanks. I appreciate this.
Colin
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Friday, February 21, 2003 5:34 PM
Subject: Re: Newsub/tides
Colin, home from the sea, a sea poem I see, but a couple of reversals bother
me.
Pools I found with crabs,
patient anemone and snails,
in the distance
the breaking sound of a receded tide.
From the jetty my confusion is deep.
Weeds leap to meet me from the sea floor,
Pools I found, from the jetty and from the sea floor among others. I would
do the last as Weeds leap from the the sea floor to meet me
A few articles could go too, like those before mind, water kelp.
Thanks.
Gary
Feb CE Chaffin, Celebrations and Blessings at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html --- Writer's Hood at
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