Thanks. This does help. I appreciate your comment.
Colin
----- Original Message -----
From: "Sue Scalf" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Friday, February 21, 2003 11:25 AM
Subject: Re: Newsub/tides
> In a message dated 02/19/2003 12:44:56 PM Central Standard Time,
> [log in to unmask] writes:
>
> << So too do night and day and human dreams
> occupy their common space
> as if to make opponents of us all
> as words like water make anew the world we live in
> as mind reorders all its elements,
> our tranquil visions calm indeed
> that find themselves in every other form,
> denying not what need not be denied. >> I think there might be a way to
> state this, but in a more subtle way. As it stands, it is pretty didactic
> and the last stanza is, indeed, the problem. Hope this helps, Sue
>
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