Thanks
Colin
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Sent: Wednesday, February 19, 2003 9:56 PM
Subject: Re: Newsub/tides
> So too do night and day and human dreams
> as if to make opponents of us all
>
> It must be the iambic pentameters, but I feel as if the poem is only just
> beginning to find itself in this last stanza.
>
> Terri )O(
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
> Behalf Of Colin dewar
> Sent: 19 February 2003 18:44
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> Subject: Newsub/tides
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>
> I wrote this one a while back but it's topical. Anyway among the things I
> want to know is whether the last stanza should be left off altogether.
It's
> a belt and braces poem. Can I make do without the braces?
>
>
> Colin
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> TIDES
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> Looking down into sea water
> in vain I try to find the morning's walk
> where I moved dry-shod over weed-covered rock
> and toyed with the idea of water
> in air where gulls could soar.
> Pools I found with crabs,
> patient anemone and snails,
> in the distance
> the breaking sound of a receded tide.
>
> From the jetty my confusion is deep.
> Weeds leap to meet me from the sea floor,
> tree-sized fronds a gauntlet
> that memory runs in recollection
> of dry boulders and demure pools
> and the patches of sand
> I marked with confident feet.
>
> Advancing waves
> bring life to the kelp,
> limp leather to forest moist
> where cod and saithe and flounder make their way,
> but it's not until
> the water stills and the mind is calm
> that I locate together
> those two places, rock for rock,
> embed once more each weed on the sea floor.
>
> So too do night and day and human dreams
> occupy their common space
> as if to make opponents of us all
> as words like water make anew the world we live in
> as mind reorders all its elements,
> our tranquil visions calm indeed
> that find themselves in every other form,
> denying not what need not be denied.
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