Daniel,
?too rather than to in the title
I am puzzled by "gnomes and statues thought of mother"
"mothers sons" looks like it is missing an apostrophe somewhere.
I would leave out the last two words of the poem. One lot of sitting is
probably enough.
BW
Colin
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From: "Sarah Janes" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, April 19, 2003 10:11 PM
Subject: New Sub. To good to be indoors.
> To good to be indoors.
>
> I woke up one morning and no one was cleaning cars
> the doves and hawks were dancing, romancing,
> eyes closed, with only the children peeping
> by the millions the gnomes and statues thought of mother.
>
> No one declared this day a prayer-a-thon
> comedians and celebs turned their grinners off
> weathermen pocketed clouds, stuck up a high
> little men twitched on silver threads like flies.
>
> The people scooped up petals from their roses,
> other mothers sons rode a wind, thrown like posies,
> many a garden in a moment became forlorn.
> The fathers will trim their edges, each Sunday morn
>
> then silently whittle away with their pruning knives,
> after washing muddy stairs, wives simply sit down, and sit.
>
>
> Daniel Janes.
>
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