In a message dated 02/19/2003 12:44:56 PM Central Standard Time,
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<< So too do night and day and human dreams
occupy their common space
as if to make opponents of us all
as words like water make anew the world we live in
as mind reorders all its elements,
our tranquil visions calm indeed
that find themselves in every other form,
denying not what need not be denied. >> I think there might be a way to
state this, but in a more subtle way. As it stands, it is pretty didactic
and the last stanza is, indeed, the problem. Hope this helps, Sue
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