Hi Terri,
Thank you. A lucky idea, I think. I've had another comment/suggestion
regarding the ending from another place, and I'll give it thought over the
next week or two, as I revisit the piece.
Many thanks - glad you enjoyed. :)
Frank
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>this is lovely - simply but cleverly drawn
>
>my only suggestion would be for the last line not to be him 'noticing'
>himself breathing, but if you could just describe him doing it?
>
>Terri )O(
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