How did that happen?? My old eyes. This is my response to Bob concerning
Wreath of sonnets please ignore. Arthur
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From: "arthur seeley" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, February 18, 2003 6:51 PM
Subject: Re: new submission: FUNGUS


> Thanks for the read Bob these are very much under revision and I'm sure
your
> comments will help.You might read my reply to Grasshopper to show you the
> direction I am heading. Regards Arthur.
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Tuesday, February 18, 2003 5:20 PM
> Subject: Re: new submission: FUNGUS
>
>
> Hi Philip,
> What a great poem! I love the way the rhythm and the rhymes work in
> emphasising the pell-mell energy. And the ending's got it's own satisfying
> twist too. It's a fine voice you've found - and I'm not at KS3, and I
enjoy
> it too!
> I might be tempted to start it:
> "Your fungus,
> your facial hair..."
> - where, with my voice, I hear the guy who(apostrophe)s speaking won't be
> into saying "or" but will be straight in there! It's the sort of poem
> that's got an unwritten "Hey" before the first word... and it won't get
> interrupted as it goes on!
> Bob
>
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>
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> >From: Philip Burton <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: new submission: FUNGUS
> >Date: Fri, 14 Feb 2003 19:43:13 +0000
> >
> >I wrote this for a workshop on anti-racism (My poems take an oblique
> >approach as you will appreciate). The age-range is KS3. It is delivered
in
> >best Billy Connolly/headteacher voice:
> >
> >FUNGUS
> >
> >
> >Your fungus
> >or facial hair
> >is horrendous
> >but you don't care!
> >
> >The vendors
> >and the makers
> >of shaving tackle
> >are going out of business
> >because of you scruff.
> >
> >You raise incredible hackle.
> >Enough is enough!
> >Can you not feel
> >how insulated you're becoming.
> >Nothing touches your face.
> >I'd need to hit it
> >with a Parliamentary mace
> >or something
> >to even raise a tickle.
> >And your nose looks like a pickle
> >glued to a coconut.
> >
> >Don't give me any 'but'.
> >It's all beard with you.
> >You're folickly-challenged.
> >You don't regard it as an issue.
> >Take a big wide look
> >in the silvered glass.
> >You're a great bearded spook.
> >Make a pass with a razor.
> >Adopt a golf club blazer.
> >You'll be glad you took
> >a smooth transition
> >more in keeping with tradition.
> >
> >Take the long view
> >if I were you.
> >Can you imagine
> >A positively furry
> >Archbishop of Canterbury?
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
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