Thanks Bob, for your encouragement. And your beginning works better than
mine. Thanks (if you can hear me through this beard!). Philip
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new submission: FUNGUS
>Date: Tue, 18 Feb 2003 17:20:02 +0000
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>Hi Philip,
>What a great poem! I love the way the rhythm and the rhymes work in
>emphasising the pell-mell energy. And the ending's got it's own satisfying
>twist too. It's a fine voice you've found - and I'm not at KS3, and I enjoy
>it too!
>I might be tempted to start it:
>"Your fungus,
>your facial hair..."
>- where, with my voice, I hear the guy who(apostrophe)s speaking won't be
>into saying "or" but will be straight in there! It's the sort of poem
>that's got an unwritten "Hey" before the first word... and it won't get
>interrupted as it goes on!
>Bob
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>>From: Philip Burton <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: new submission: FUNGUS
>>Date: Fri, 14 Feb 2003 19:43:13 +0000
>>
>>I wrote this for a workshop on anti-racism (My poems take an oblique
>>approach as you will appreciate). The age-range is KS3. It is delivered in
>>best Billy Connolly/headteacher voice:
>>
>>FUNGUS
>>
>>
>>Your fungus
>>or facial hair
>>is horrendous
>>but you don’t care!
>>
>>The vendors
>>and the makers
>>of shaving tackle
>>are going out of business
>>because of you scruff.
>>
>>You raise incredible hackle.
>>Enough is enough!
>>Can you not feel
>>how insulated you’re becoming.
>>Nothing touches your face.
>>I’d need to hit it
>>with a Parliamentary mace
>>or something
>>to even raise a tickle.
>>And your nose looks like a pickle
>>glued to a coconut.
>>
>>Don’t give me any ‘but’.
>>It’s all beard with you.
>>You’re folickly-challenged.
>>You don’t regard it as an issue.
>>Take a big wide look
>>in the silvered glass.
>>You’re a great bearded spook.
>>Make a pass with a razor.
>>Adopt a golf club blazer.
>>You’ll be glad you took
>>a smooth transition
>>more in keeping with tradition.
>>
>>Take the long view
>>if I were you.
>>Can you imagine
>>A positively furry
>>Archbishop of Canterbury?
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
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