Sarah laughed at the prospect of becoming a mother at 90. I just thought of
her as laughing a lot through life.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 02.17.03 3:13:09 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah
I liked the poem very much, you manage to create the right atmosphere in
very few words. Just one thing: I understand the desire to have the word
"laughing" repeated as a chorus line but the problem is that it's not
clear who's laughing and why. Sara wasn't laughed at - on the contrary,
she was the lady of the house of Abraham, no one dared stand up to her.
But when you finish the first stanza with "all the women" and then comes
the word "laughing" it reads as if they were laughing at her which is
completely not true. The only laughing that was made was by Sara herself
as a reaction to the news of the angels, and that point isn't clear in
your poem.
Kol Tuv
Tammara >>
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