It feels tighter the 2nd time around, Alison; although not changed that
much, tonally it's sharper...
at least to this reader reading at the moment...
Doug
Douglas Barbour
Department of English
University of Alberta
Edmonton Alberta Canada T6G 2E5
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I do not limit myself: I imitate
many fancy things such as the dull red
cloth of literature, its mumbled griefs
Lisa Robertson
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