Árni Ibsen wrote:
>
> SNAPSHOT 4
>
> a glorious day
> ideal weather for creating
> and someone's begun
>
> already a roller
> and a bulldozer
> working the old
>
> tussocky potato-fields
> on the other side of my fence
> the new extension
>
> to the old church-yard
> will reach across the slope
> so when the time comes
>
> it'll be a glorious day
> ideal weather for creating
> and i can simply look
>
> over my shoulder
> wave happily and climb
> over the fence
>
> Árni Ibsen
> Hafnarfjördur, Iceland.
>
> Before breakfast 21/05/03
>
> --
>
Nice. Rather Creeleyish. After "glorious" and "ideal," "happily" is I
think unnecessary - how about "wave and climb over / the fence"?
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