Hi Gar,
This has a very chant-like quality, I think. The repetition carries the
reader along, I enjoy the play with colors, the spirituality involved with
the everydayness. This reminds me of a competition I entered recently, one
in which I faired very poorly, to write an incantation. Very repetitive
form and oddly difficult. But your poems form allows this very nicely.
CW, Mary :O)
--- Gary B <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> (c and c please. The the's in S2 and 3 are delibrate for the mood I
> sense.
> Your thoughts welcome.
>
> Green Grows Summer's Brown
>
> Lightning brushes across the South ridge,
> from bulge to edge, Gaia's eyes flash.
>
> Green the driveway gravel,
> green the farmhouse shakes,
> green the thistle behind the barn,
> green the grass unwatered since Flag Day.
>
> Thunder clashes among the clouds,
> from hill to valley, Gaia's voice cries.
>
> Still the robins in the wild plums,
> still the cattle huddled near the barn,
> still both hound and the coon he will hunt,
> still the child who waits supper.
>
> The sky is green tonight,
> the sky turns orange as evening fades.
>
> The sky, orange, is as bright
> as the new box at the neighbors.
>
> And on the lawn
> under Gaia's gaze and voice,
> we forget how brown our lives
> and stand in wonder
> as when She and we were young
> and believed
> grass was always green.
>
> Feb guest is TE Ballard and Gar does garbage at:
> http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html,
>
> Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
=====
Good Cheer & Be Well,
Maryann Hazen-Stearns
"Under The Limbo Stick"
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