Nothing I do is arbitrary; I chose to line break there to break some poetic
conventions and keep the poem from being ordinary. I thank you for your
considerate thinking on it though.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 2/21/02 8:28:29 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Rhyfkah,
I like the way you have formed the hell section here. The only concern would
be that some of the other line endings seem a little arbitrary and the poem
would be more effective if this was looked at. Example: "receive a/rose to
tango".
bw
James
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