on 19/2/02 12:03 am, Brigid Anthony at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> Yes, triolets can drive you mad.
> But I love writing them, and they're a doddle to write, of course, because
> five of the eight lines are repeaters.
> I think it's important to have strong repeating lines, as any weakness is
> multiplied by the repetitions. (In yours, although the poem mostly works
> well, I think your second repeating line needs more attention.)
> Triolets have a great tradition as light verse (Hopkins wrote a couple of
> crackers) but to me the big challenge is to use that form to serious
> effect.
> Regards,
> David
yes I think you're right, David, and I hope you didn't take my remarks as a
criticism, I've just been 'trying' triolets again after not writing one for
ages, and I suddenly saw their facility, but it has to be a couple of lines
really worth remembering and really worth rolling round the tongue and mind.
I think your Margaret/Sarah poem wasn't in tune with most people's feelings
of royalist-athesim, plus the terrible shock of Princess Diana's death came
back to people with this recent funeral. The Royals were lucky if all we did
was photograph their grief (if such it was)
Sally ee
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