Hi Ryfkah *
I've been reading your poem each time I've clicked on! Getting yet more (and
not having to struggle to get more - just enjoying what else surfaces!).
I guess the word renascent's been talked out (and I wouldn't disagree with
that - it sounds strange, coming from a somewhere else, a different
register, to what follows...)
and I wonder, too, about the line "cadre of existence" (can't invest those
words with any meaning...).
And I'm struggling to accept the phrase "astral sky" (do you just mean "a
sky with stars shining"?). It sounds as if it should mean more... (it
sounds, as they used to say, Poetick - like calling the sun a golden orb)
But the rest of it weaves a mystery a like to hear and read,
Bob
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New Sub.: 4tete/#68/Carpe Noche
>Date: Sat, 16 Feb 2002 12:45:54 EST
>
>4tete/#68/Carpe Noche
>
>Renascent
>rescued from marriage by
>divorce she unpuckers rouged
>mouth to receive a
>rose to tango
>Extreme unction
>patchouli oil rubbed in
>to limbs nipples throat
>cadre of existence
>
>He briefcases to office
>Surrogate wife silently mouths good
>bye No dogs no cats
>their pirate parrot Petey patters
> go to hell
>go to
> hell go
>to
> h
> e
> l
> l
>
>Mary go
>round refracts
>undulates cheek
>to cheek with Afro-
>Latin impresario
>Poncho Sanchez giving up
>the beat
>Vampires other night owls
>slink in rhythm
>like Eve's serpent the whine
>of July fireworks the priestly
>blessing on Yom Kippur
>asparagus in spring
>
>She dances in astral sky
>a bat bird plane
>flying fish
> a woman
>
>not an angel
>
>Ryfkah 2/16/02
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