as though each pocket were full
> > and she cries as though the very beast of life
> >
> > leaping within her heart had escaped
> > and she fights as though her last breath
Mary, not sure how I missed this the first time around. Well done, though
you might] consider fewer connectors, esp the ands above.
The kind of thing we ordinarily remind each other of (g).
Thanks.
Gary
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