on 6/1/02 2:51 pm, Bob Cooper at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> This has been lurking, dozing and not doing much for a while...
> (possibly good reasons for that) but (or, so) I submit it for comment,
> criticsism, etc...
>
I like this a lot, Bob. I rather like long lines anyway, and this time they
are like the streaks of the fighters over the landscape. The dislocated
noises are well described... I think it's ok as it is. Sally-ee
>
> Giving It Some Air
>
>
> So you talk about sound, about the choppers in Apocalypse Now,
> how dislocated noises have to be, as jets - first one, then the always other
> -
> scuff across Northumberland, each swung like a crucifix necklace,
> passing large as the tractor, practising for the wars on the evening news
> and we see their advancing dog-nosed silence, the pilots’ helmets,
> the after shakes that fill the valley head, each affirming they’re so real,
> because everything’s in flight, my words, your words, the wind
> that invisibly leans on us, grinds the atoms of our world elsewhere,
> brings back to us molecules we’d forgotten we uttered weeks before,
> and we continue, sometimes shaping things with hands, opening gates,
> closing them, catching each other up, repeating history again,
> returning to the car, changing, dropping muddy boots on the front page
> and we hear it rip under the scrape of our mud on its photograph -
> tearing through a peacekeeper’s troop carrier, a pick-up truck, refugees.
>
>
> Bob Cooper
>
>
> N.B. It's all supposed to be in long lines (if your screen drops words down,
> so just one or two appear on a separate line, then they're supposed to be
> stuck on after the words on the previous line).
>
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