Not just by George you've got it! Cleverly and workingly the image now
gleams!
Bob


>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub short and not so sweet poems
>Date: Thu, 14 Feb 2002 18:50:45 -0000
>
>Thanks Grassy and Bob I've got it. By George I've got it. No need to
>experiment with the jelly just change the last two lines around and let the
>jelly slip off a spoon. Howzat! Thanks yes the Haiku needs a full stop. Bw
>Sally
>
>Jelly Belly
>
>I wanted to tell him
>I loved him
>but the words
>slipped off my tongue
>like jelly off a spoon
>slopped on to the floor
>like a heart
>still beating
>not broken.
>
>Sally James
>
>----- Original Message -----
>From: Bob Cooper
>Sent: 14 February 2002 18:14
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub short and not so sweet poems
>
>Hi Sally,
>I'm thinking/wondering about the jelly on the floor... that it doest break!
>Glass bowls break or shatter, but jelly sort of flobbles...
>And where did it slide from? Mouth, spoon, bowl, table? My jelly sort of
>bounces, somersaults, down my clothing!
>If y ask me, the shorter the poem, the harder it gets! (to write!!)
>And I immediately got an image of red jelly too!
>
>And the other poem? Yeh, a fine choice of clothing to mention! Does it need
>a full stop at the end?
>
>Bob
>
> >From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: Re: new sub short and not so sweet poems
> >Date: Thu, 14 Feb 2002 16:51:09 -0000
> >
> >Hi Maryann. I was thinking of red jelly at the time of writing too.
>Cheers
> >Sally J
> >
> >----- Original Message -----
> >From: Maryann Hazen-Stearns
> >Sent: 14 February 2002 01:18
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: Re: new sub short and not so sweet poems
> >
> >Hi Sally,
> >
> >For some reason, this poem is extremely visual to me. I think it must be
> >the way you've used the slippery jelly and the broken heart; Geez, what a
> >combo! Super well done on this one Sally.
> >
> >CW, Mary :O)
> >
> >--- Sally James <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > >
> > >
> > > I wanted to tell him
> > > I loved him
> > > but the words
> > > slipped off my tongue
> > > like jelly
> > > slid to the ground
> > > like a heart
> > > not beating
> > > just broken.
> > >
> > > Sally James
> > >
> > >
> > > Valentine's day is
> > > washing underpants and socks
> > > and no chocolates
> > >
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