on 10/2/02 5:31 pm, Arthur at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> sally-ee: what's " Real poetry"??
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> From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
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> Sent: Sunday, February 10, 2002 4:05 PM
> Subject: Re: New Sub: Grey imp
>
Sorry it's my grammar. I didn't mean I think real poetry is a good thing, I
meant, umm, umm, the song rhythm sounds like poetry. I think a lot of modern
poetry sounds like chopped up prose. Don't tell me I didn't invent that
expression, I actually think I DID invent it, quite a long time ago. I think
rhythm is the most important thing in poetry, and that modern poetry can and
often does have rhythm, and if it doesn't, then I dont like it.
but of course I do think real poetry is a good thing. I'm geting confused.
Sally-ee.
>
>> on 6/2/02 10:29 pm, grasshopper at [log in to unmask]
>> wrote:
>>
>>
>> I like this, grasshopper, it's got an old fashioned music which I think is
> a
>> good thing, like real poetry. And there's an impression that you've gone
>> with the words, there's no prosaic logic to it, but what is the grey imp?
> Is
>> this something you are asking your readers?
>>
>> I wonder if 'quench him with my tears' is a little bit facile, the easy
>> option? I think you could keep tears as the end rhyme yet be a bit more
>> specific about this relationship between you and the grey imp; don't
> follow
>> your oldfashioned poetics with an old fashioned cliche, 'quench'. ?
>> Sally-ee
>>
>>> The grey imp on my shoulder
>>> is full of winter things
>>> Sometimes he is like a stone
>>> and sometimes he grows wings
>>>
>>> The grey imp on my shoulder
>>> may jump into your lap
>>> He'll stain your skin and clothing
>>> he's such a sticky chap
>>>
>>> The grey imp on my shoulder
>>> has been with me for years
>>> I feed him on my sorrow
>>> and quench him with my tears.
>>>
>>> grasshopper
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