Hi James,
(my message has just dissappeared, - I hope it didn't get sent) cos
I was half way through saying that your comments are valid if the poem is
using language that belongs to that experience. And Sally's comments are
equally valid! I sense that's how the game (the poems written this way) must
work.
Bob
>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub: Offender
>Date: Fri, 8 Feb 2002 08:52:54 +0000
>
>Ouch Cara,
>Think I have totally misunderstood the poem.
>My apologies.
>bw
>James
>
>
>>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Re: New Sub: Offender
>>Date: Thu, 7 Feb 2002 16:44:46 -0000
>>
>>Hi Cara, This poem says a lot to me. I think a lot of people can identify.
>>Anyone who has a neurological illness will find the reference to neurone,
>>axon and dendrite interesting. The diagnosis of M.S. is difficult in the
>>early stages. The victim I see as the sufferer. The offender, the illness.
>>The friend who sees this suffering pleads for the illness to leave quietly
>>now. There are periods of remission in M.S. I find your poem covers the
>>nature and symptoms of M.S.very well. Bw Sally
>>
>>----- Original Message -----
>>From: cara may
>>Sent: 04 February 2002 22:51
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: New Sub: Offender
>>
>>-- Offender
>>
>>
>>
>> For months you have thwarted
>> the most talented of investigators.
>> They have failed to read
>> your finger-prints, write your profile,
>> identify the places
>> in which you lurk.
>>
>> You continue your assault,
>> twist your victim's gut,
>> bleach his face,
>> bring such rage to his tongue
>> that even his closest friend
>> is ready to desert him.
>>
>> 'No current identity' they say,
>> shadower of past pain, lingerer
>> in neurone, axon, synapse,
>> to be evicted
>> by the battering-ram
>> of tranquillisers.
>>
>> I am your victim's closest friend.
>> I ask you to leave quietly. Now.
>>
>>cara february 2001
>>
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>bw
>James
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