In a message dated 02/06/2002 4:45:58 PM Central Standard Time,
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The grey imp on my shoulder
is full of winter things
Sometimes he is like a stone
and sometimes he grows wings
Grasshopper, I think it would be stronger to keep it metaphorical,
"Sometimes he is a stone/ and sometimes he grows wing.
The grey imp on my shoulder
may jump into your lap
He'll stain your skin and clothing
he's such a sticky chap
The grey imp on my shoulder
has been with me for years
I feed him on my sorrow
and quench him with my tears.
>> I like this. It needs a good strong title.
Thanks for letting me see it. See my comment above about the metaphor. Sue
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