Hi Arthur,
You are obviously working on a series of poems based on a journey you've
made. I find the impact of these things stay long afterwards. I like this
and like the series. Just one quib on this one, I don't think you need "all
explain" in the last line. Thanks for explaining the machette bit... I'm a
real thicko at times.
bw
James
>From: Arthur <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: new sub: First night in Honiara
>Date: Fri, 1 Feb 2002 18:30:16 -0000
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>First Night in Honiara
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>Breathing softer than the sleeping bush
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>I feed my jetlag with another smoke.
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>Moonlight defines each bole and leaf.
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>Beyond the shore the Pacific sighs,
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>a steely sliver through the trees;
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>ululations of a moon-struck dog;
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>gecko strewing pebbles in the pool of night,
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>all explain, I stand, waist deep, in alien corn.
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bw
James
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