on 28/1/02 8:01 pm, Frank Faust at [log in to unmask] wrote:
I like a lot of this, Frank. I think I agree with PP that bringing mother in
after the father stanzas is a bit too much. the first two sections come over
literally, father-in-the-way kind of stock problem, but when you bring in
'my mother' I wonder if it can be taken literally at all. Perhaps you mean
'the father side of me' and 'the mother side of me' but it doesn't really
come over. The writing is fine. Sally-ee
> my father has threatened his silence
> for I cannot be trusted
> each time he speaks he says there is a chance
> I will take him at more than face value and elevate
> his memories into verse-sagas and tales
> when he reads what I've written he feels somehow displaced
> by a man concocted from fiction penned in his first person
> it is a strange way to revisit the past
> and it makes him uncomfortable
>
> he is smiling when he says it
> so perhaps he is joking
> but there is an edge to the sound of his laughter
> he has repeated himself it is three times now
> and he looks at me uncertainly
> as though he's no longer sure
> of just who I am or why
> this long ago history is worthy of writing
> when the stories are only of every day poverty
> and not so exciting
> to those that lived through them at the time
> so why would I bother with that after all of these years
>
> but my mother says that I should ignore him
> write whatever I want to and there is plenty of wall space
> so one more framed poem will not be too many
> and whatever it is I believe I am doing
> while they don't understand it at all
> she is sure it is worthy of good faith and pride
>
> ~
>
> Frank
>
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