Sue, a fine piece. I see the Creator.
Some suggestions.
Thanks.
Gary
You who made these wings
and formed such whirls (no line break)
and patterns,
perhaps you save in some drawer (perhaps in some drawer you save)
the design of brush and pen, (your designs brushed and penned)
the draft and erasures (,/drafts and)
that formed the hollow bones. (no the)
I choose to think, (break at writes,)
as one who writes, you keep it all,
Finally, consider capping You given who you talk to and what you say.
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