Gary, Thanks for your comment: I can see the problem.
I was trying to show not tell but it's a real art
isn't it? I think the lad is about eight years old.
He has to stretch to reach the counter and he has the
kind of skin you would worry for if you caused him to
touch a nettle or similar. cheers and thanks, cara
--- garydawg <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > I see
the light that glows
> on vunerable skin, and from within.
> Will the world give him time
> for Time? I ask.
>
> Cara, good work. However I am confused as to his
> age. At first I thought a
> babe, then a lad, thn perhaps a bit older. Teen?
> Now, old but challenged?
> Could be clearer.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
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