I think if you are going to use rhyme
you need to make the rhyme scheme consistent
without, of course, losing the metre.
yours
Gerald
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From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, January 26, 2002 10:37 AM
Subject: New Sub: Decewmber 28
> First draft for c & C ,please
>
> December 28
>
> Father, can I see you
> about my cat. He's very ill.
> I took him to the RSPCA
> and got a tapeworm pill
>
> but nothing seems to work,
> I'm sure he's getting worse.
> Can you suggest a soothing psalm
> or helpful Bible verse ?
>
> I know God's busy in the clouds
> doing stuff and healing crowds.
> Is there a moment for my kitty
> in the kingdom of His pity?
>
> My kitty can't explain in words
> but he doesn't kill the little birds
> He stays with me inside my flat
> and is a good and gentle cat.
>
> Father forgive me if I'm wrong
> but I've loved my kitty for so long.
> I've seen small angels in the sky
> with fur and whiskers flying by.
>
> Dear Father, if you're not too busy,
> please hold my hand and bless my pussy.
>
> grasshopper
>
> (December 28 : The Feast of the Holy Innocents)
>
>
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