on 26/1/02 6:00 pm, David Anthony at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> I Saw a Snowdrop
>
> I saw a snowdrop yesterday.
> Proclaiming spring’s around the corner
> seems premature; I’ll simply say
> I saw a snowdrop yesterday!
> It filled my head with thoughts so fey
> I called my Muse to thus forewarn her:
> “I saw a snowdrop yesterday
> proclaiming spring’s around the corner”.
Yes, thisis a nice whatjumacallit, and they are hard to write, and I think
your repeated couplet is very good but I'm not sure if lines five and six
come up to the expected level, it sounds as if you've just been trying to
rhyme it out.
I've got one or two snowdrops coming out, too, and it IS very exciting!
Sally-ee
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