Bless you, Arthur and Colin for your kind comments. Actually I was expecting
comments on faults in the metre as I slapped in down early this morning
after watching a late-night US tv programme called Philly, featuring yet
another glamorous female attorney.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Dewar Colin [FVPC]" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, December 30, 2002 11:23 AM
Subject: Re: New sub:Tried and true
> Grasshopper,
>
> I can run my hand along this poem and there aren't any knots in it. It's
> like the one on starlings and the one about the Xmas get together; you
know
> a pen from a camel's hump. I am reluctant to comment because the poem has
> already undergone a high level of scrutiny before coming out, with
apparent
> shortcomings likely contrivances.
>
> I wonder if you could get away with "shaven" instead of "clean-shaved" in
L1
> of V4? And I'd put a fullstop after perps rather than a comma, with a
> capital S at the beginning of the next line.
>
>
> Colin
>
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: grasshopper [SMTP:[log in to unmask]]
> > Sent: Monday, December 30, 2002 10:23 AM
> > Subject: New sub:Tried and true
> >
> > Tried and true
> >
> > I want to be tried in the U.S. of A.
> > I want to be tried on tv.
> > I want a defender in seams and high heels
> > so the people aren't looking at me.
> >
> > I want a jury made up of all men,
> > twelve citizens trusted and true.
> > I want an attorney in micro and silk
> > so the jurors will know what to do.
> >
> > I want to be tried in the U.S. of A.
> > I want to be tried on tv.
> > I want my sweet lawyer to point out the fact
> > that Society's guilty -not me.
> >
> > I want to be clean-shaved,dark-suited and smart,
> > and then if they send me to pen,
> > I'll campaign for justice from behind bars
> > and soon have my freedom again.
> >
> > I want to be tried in the U.S. of A.
> > I want to be tried on tv.
> > America knows we're all victims not perps,
> > so that's where a good boy should be.
> >
> > grasshopper
>
>
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