JiscMail Logo
Email discussion lists for the UK Education and Research communities

Help for THE-WORKS Archives


THE-WORKS Archives

THE-WORKS Archives


THE-WORKS@JISCMAIL.AC.UK


View:

Message:

[

First

|

Previous

|

Next

|

Last

]

By Topic:

[

First

|

Previous

|

Next

|

Last

]

By Author:

[

First

|

Previous

|

Next

|

Last

]

Font:

Proportional Font

LISTSERV Archives

LISTSERV Archives

THE-WORKS Home

THE-WORKS Home

THE-WORKS  2002

THE-WORKS 2002

Options

Subscribe or Unsubscribe

Subscribe or Unsubscribe

Log In

Log In

Get Password

Get Password

Subject:

Re: sub: a shooting star in emergency - barbara O

From:

"Dewar Colin [FVPC]" <[log in to unmask]>

Reply-To:

The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>

Date:

Mon, 30 Dec 2002 09:48:30 -0000

Content-Type:

text/plain

Parts/Attachments:

Parts/Attachments

text/plain (90 lines)

I use other people's stories and sentiments in my poems too and still use
the first person because it makes it easier for me to get in touch with what
the sentiment is. Sometimes I mix my own experience with others (and maybe
things that never happened) to make a composite poem. Aids the illusion I'm
having an interesting life. Shouldn't be a problem with this unless
confidentiality. (No person can be identified from it, hopefully). When it
comes to slicing and dicing in literature (by whoever) I would like to think
that it is justified  by the attempt to get down to something essential so
that others can benefit in some way. This poem feels like it is going down
this road.

Colin


> -----Original Message-----
> From: Frank Faust [SMTP:[log in to unmask]]
> Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2002 8:18 AM
> To:   [log in to unmask]
> Subject:      Re: sub: a shooting star in emergency - barbara O
>
> Wow Barbara,
>
> you've done a huge amount of work for me on this. Thank you. At first
> glance
> I see the sense of your comments - they look good.
>
> I'm glad of the help, because knowing where to begin with the slicing and
> dicing has felt a little beyond me. It is not my story, but that of a
> close
> friend, as told to me - the 'first person' is my friend. I always feel odd
> when I take someone else's story and then write it in 1st person - like an
> intruder, or a thief, so it is difficult for me to get to the point of
> even
> feeling I have a right to the poem, let alone working it over, but that is
> clearly what is needed and I'll try to salvage it - make it tighter for a
> more consistent read that doesn't stray into inappropriate territory.
>
> Again,
>
> Thank you.
>
> Cheers,
>
> Frank
>
>
>
> The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
> http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
>
>
>
>
> >
> >This reminds me of my 'Sarah' poem the first time I submitted it.  I had
> >madly written down my feelings as soon as I came in the door trying to
> >process all that had happened that night.  I then put it to a couple of
> >lists
> >before I edited it down to where it is today.  I would trim this some,
> >maybe
> >not just now, but you will see where it needs it in the days to come, as
> >the
> >emotion recedes some.  For one, I would begin with 'I feel I am a
> >bookend...'
> >
> >I have put a few thoughts below.  Not by any means a finished edit.
> >Hopefully some thoughts to help get your creative juices going.  You'll
> >know
> >if some of this sounds right or not.
> >
> >But my main thought is that this is a poem about what happened at the end
> >and
> >that what needs to be trimmed is anything that takes away from the
> telling
> >of
> >that event.
> >
> >I would change the title to 'Bookends'
> >
> >Thanks for your recent note and hug,
> >Barbara
>
>
> _________________________________________________________________
> MSN 8 limited-time offer: Join now and get 3 months FREE*.
> http://join.msn.com/?page=dept/dialup&xAPID=42&PS=47575&PI=7324&DI=7474&SU
> =
> http://www.hotmail.msn.com/cgi-bin/getmsg&HL=1216hotmailtaglines_newmsn8is
> here_3mf

Top of Message | Previous Page | Permalink

JiscMail Tools


RSS Feeds and Sharing


Advanced Options


Archives

January 2022
August 2021
September 2020
June 2018
April 2014
February 2014
November 2013
July 2013
June 2013
May 2013
April 2013
March 2013
February 2013
January 2013
September 2011
June 2011
May 2011
April 2011
March 2011
February 2011
January 2011
November 2010
August 2010
July 2010
June 2010
May 2010
April 2010
March 2010
January 2010
December 2009
November 2009
October 2009
September 2009
August 2009
June 2009
May 2009
April 2009
February 2009
January 2009
December 2008
October 2008
September 2008
August 2008
July 2008
April 2008
March 2008
February 2008
January 2008
December 2007
November 2007
September 2007
August 2007
July 2007
June 2007
May 2007
April 2007
March 2007
February 2007
January 2007
2006
2005
2004
2003
2002
2001


JiscMail is a Jisc service.

View our service policies at https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/policyandsecurity/ and Jisc's privacy policy at https://www.jisc.ac.uk/website/privacy-notice

For help and support help@jisc.ac.uk

Secured by F-Secure Anti-Virus CataList Email List Search Powered by the LISTSERV Email List Manager