Hi Arthur,
A fine poem! Simplicity is brill ain't it just.
I'm reminded of an A.R. Ammonds poem called Small Song (that's also short):
"The reeds give
way to the
wind and give
the wind away"
But you extend your piece much further... the brownish hue of Pennine water
is really caught with the word "burnished" as well. It's a canny word that
evokes coldness as well! The jolt I feel with "the earth turns again"
(because I usually feel the world must revolve smoothly - so the word
"again" is interesting!).
Bob
>From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Solstice
>Date: Fri, 20 Dec 2002 06:12:34 -0000
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> Solstice
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>Reeds divide the wind
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>beside the burnished tarn.
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>Under a winter moon
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>sided sleet re-shapes the moor.
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>The earth turns again-
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>the silent hurtle into spring.
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