Make sure you are ready for them when they do.
Robin
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Gary Blankenship [SMTP:[log in to unmask]]
> Sent: Wednesday, December 18, 2002 2:13 PM
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: Revision: Wide Highways, Thin Roads(Gary)
>
> Colin, thanks. You said:
>
> I didn't like so
> much, stoplights morphing into bat's eyes. When I think of bats I think of
> something frail, with small dark eyes, relying on echolocation rather
> than
> sight. Or did you refer to vampires in a horror film? In which case it
> drops
> horrific associations into the poem which doesn't quite fit with what
> comes
> before and after, with the posssible exception of a horrific accident. Or
> was it a clever play on "cat's eyes" which do reflect light, in both
> usages?
>
> *
>
> The bat line is difficult
>
> Night fog so thick on the Bay bridge,
> > stoplights morphed into bat's eyes,
>
> I've moved it and dropped the pileup line so its place is less in the
> poem,
> but this image is mentioned by most readers as an issue. I need to think
> of
> an alternative. Right now,
>
> stoplights smaller than rabbit eyes
>
> but I don't like that either. Some kind of critter will come to me
> someday.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
>
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> balas
> no!
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