Colin, I do not believe this is helped by the variation in line and some
breaks. (green/remain). Perhaps if each line 10/12 count or about:
It has buried the forts of Romans
and the shields of Celts with its implacable skin.
The funnelled wind has no choice but to move
in its tunnel or be deflected. The clouds rage.
The bleaching light falls.
or not
Thanks.
Gary
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