Gary,
Er, yes, but I was trying to make it long. It's a symbolic monologue and I
wanted the space to build up a psychic world with its own cross refs.
However I hate to defend the poem because then it might put you off
criticising anything for its length, which is always a reasonable thing to
do.
Colin
-----Original Message-----
> From: Gary Blankenship [SMTP:[log in to unmask]]
> Sent: Monday, December 16, 2002 3:36 PM
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> Subject: Re: newsub(Islands)
>
> Colin, there is a lot to like here
>
>
> From this island the shale-grey sea
> is the same sea that appears
>
> from that island over there:
> whale-black by shade of cloud
>
>
> but to me it is far too long. I would am for a third less if not half.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
>
> Dec Byron Sacre at: http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html... Writer's
> Hood at http://www.writershood.com/... Poets for Peace.... ˇPoemas sí,
> balas
> no!
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