Thanks Arthur, SallyJ and David.
Yes, I've never been happy with the ending. The acrostic was to upstage the
others doing the exercise and was really rather naughty.
If you've ever been to Wast Water on a grey wet day you'll know the grim
forbidding aspect of the lake. I always remember the phrase 'Grendel's
loose' when I'm there.
Thanks again, Roger.
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From: "Brigid Anthony" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Sunday, December 15, 2002 9:07 PM
Subject: new sub: Wast Water
Powerful alliterative poem, capturing the essence of the form and the
brooding qualities of Wastwater.
The structure seems to go a little awry in the last couple of lines.
The layout's unaesthetic.
If Beowulf saw an acrostic I suspect he'd turn in his barrow.
Still, I like it greatly.
Regards,
David
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