Hi Christina,
I love this! The "peh" sound of the letter is such a small breathy sound (is
it called a plosive?) and it's a sort of cheeky, mischevious, kind of sound
that I think you've used well.
I get a real feeling of the the narrator here, of someone who's so reluctant
to say anything bluntly, or too loudly, yet eventually has to say
something... and the last line (linked to where it starts) shows why.
(I don't understand "the p position" but I'm not worried about not knowing.
I mean, it sounds as if it means something! (And I can always look it up if
I want to!)
Bob
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Pretend
>Date: Sat, 14 Dec 2002 06:00:59 EST
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> Pretend
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> You haven't lost the plot. We won't pursue perception
> or prescribe Prozac.
>
> You have problems: palpitations in your pelvis.
> Pomegranates are pink and full of pips.
>
> Let's proceed on the premise that a planet (probably Pluto)
> is placed in the 'p' position. Pots on planks,
>
> plates of pork and potato. There's a pinch in this
>particular
>patchwork:
> the prerequisite is panic. Pain's the panacea.
>
> Perhaps we're prying? Please,
> we're not pimps or policemen
>
> and it's perfectly plain:
> you're poised on a pin.
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> christina fletcher
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>
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