Hello Colin,
This is an interesting idea and I think you´ve handled it well. There is only one thing that disturbs me: your lines `Can it be from my garden / whence springs the treasured green?´ Since the word `whence´ means `from where´ the word `from´ in your line is redundant. I think I would rewrite this without using `whence´ at all.
Best wishes, Mike
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View From the Desk
Sitting here at my desk
how can I not know
it is only the pine tree at the end of my garden
that I see through the glass?
Have I not passed it often
as I walked along the rough path
and given it no second thought:
just a Norway Spruce in a bit of hard ground,
lank and half grown, wet, not even indigenous
and yet no matter how often I have gone unheeding by,
beyond the window
with no land in sight
it is pine against blue.
Can it be from my garden
whence springs the treasured green?
I dream of mountains with tree lines
and northern snow.
Now and from this angle
in another land
it seems to grow.
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Colin
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