Hi Frank.
The intention was to sing it to the tune of "The runaway train came over the
hill and she blew, she blew...etc. Hope this helps.
Philip
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new submission: the runaway train
>Date: Sun, 1 Dec 2002 10:05:08 +1100
>
>Hi Phillip,
>
>Just a small comment. The repetitions don't work for me. I'm not suggesting
>they shouldn't be there - that is no problem. My issue is that I couldn't
>get a rhythm from them in my reading, making me wonder if they were the
>right words to repeat (which they should be) or if the presentation of them
>should be patterned more rhythmically than it is to date. The other
>possibility is that I haven't read it as you intended - apologies if so.
>
>Cheers,
>
>Frank
>
>
>
>The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
>http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
>
>> the runaway train
>>
>>
>>the modified crops came over the hill
>>and they knew, they knew
>>the modified crops came over the hill
>>and they knew, they knew
>>The modified crops came over the hill
>>disease resistant and marketable
>>and they knew, knew, knew, knew, knew
>>
>>predictable yields and pests so few
>>they knew, they knew
>>predictable yields and pests so few
>>they knew, they knew
>>predictable yields and pests so few
>>ecology can go and stew
>>and they knew, knew, knew, knew, knew
>>
>>they triggered a gene for sterile seed
>>and they knew, they knew
>>they triggered a gene for sterile seed
>>and they knew, they knew
>>investing a seed with a sterile gene
>>is tantamount to a money machine
>>and they knew, knew, knew, knew, knew
>>
>>the following year we’re digging deep
>>and they knew, they knew
>>the following year we’re digging deep
>>and they knew, they knew
>>the following year we’re digging deep
>>their seed-corn now will not come cheap
>>as they knew, knew, knew, knew, knew
>>
>>we’re in the pockets of company men
>>and they knew, they knew
>>we’re in the pockets of company men
>>and they knew, they knew
>>we’re in the pockets of company men
>>capitulate and where’s the end?
>>and they knew, knew, knew, knew, knew
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
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