This feels as if it has been trimmed a lot and maybe too much as the lines
seem to stutter along rather than flow. Not what I'd consider one of your
better pieces Ryfkah.
bw
James
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: There Is a Season
>Date: Sun, 24 Nov 2002 16:14:05 EST
>
>There Is a Season
>
>The mother peers out water
>beaded pane Ambivalent
>tears swell eyes
>She dreams of small children
>
>Jade hummingbird wings
>whisper above purple sage
>Near winter's first rain
>rivers down hillside
>
>Indian summer fires
>amber leaves Birds of Paradise
>yawn tangerine blooms
>Light narrows in shadow
>
>Her grown-up children
>flutter She watches
>them like bright balloons
>connect to the universe
>
>Ryfkah 11/24/02
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