In a message dated 11.25.02 3:22:57 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
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Here they lie, numbered like the years,
like my confusion of the apparent and transparent. >>
Love these lines; I would check some of the images such as grey rainclouds -
might you say this differently? I like violet flush; you could say setting
sun's violet flush...almost personifying it that way. Beautiful poem.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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