Thanks, Nancy. I'll look for the verb.



bw
James





>From: Nancy Gandhi <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Procession
>Date: Sat, 23 Nov 2002 20:51:32 +0530
>
>It's lovely, James.  Only I found the last line awkward.  You need a verb
>or
>something, I'm not sure.  I really liked this.
>Nancy
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
>Behalf Of James Bell
>Sent: Saturday, 23 November, 2002 8:45 PM
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Procession
>
>
>A rough cut from the note book. C&C welcome .
>
>PROCESSION
>
>By some tacit agreement they all
>silently move in procession
>from shoreline up the mudbank
>and loosely congregate round
>and old mooring post among
>the marrum (spelt wrong) grass
>an evangelical gathering of
>white breasts and black heads
>a uniformly dressed priesthood
>that then stands still and waits
>for who knows what in quiet communion
>while only a stray honk of dissent
>breaks the hush as the wind blows
>in off the estuary
>
>even the slow body waddle and plod
>of large webbed feet up the bank
>is freeze framed - only the trickle
>of low tide water not joined in the effect
>
>
>
>
>bw
>James


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