Thanks Ryfka, and yes there are a host of 'and's. It was and is a 
performance poem so the 'and's are intended to give a sort of breathless 
drive or pressure to the voice. Try reading it aloud (and!) see if you 
agree. Philip


>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new....well, part-new submission
>Date: Sun, 24 Nov 2002 15:34:09 EST
>
>The message of the poem comes through but look at the beginnings of your
>lines...as important as the end...lots of ands.
>
>kol tuv, Ryfkah
>
>In a message dated 11.21.02 12:27:16 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
>
><< and yet we cart it through the sea
>
>
>and when it coats the coast of Brittany
>
>and The Vendee,
>
>and they listen in vain for a gannet song
>
>from Belle Isle-en-mer to les Sables d’Olonne
>
>and when it Clots The Galapagos,
>
>and there’s neither Stormy petrel
>
>nor Lava gull from Ecuador to San Cristobal,
>
>and now it happens once again
>
>and the limpid  sea is a foul gel
>
>from Cocon, in Spain, to Corcubion
>
>we say “Weren’t me, guv, honest”
>
>and wash our hands and think,
>
>“Just as long as I’ve oil under the bonnet”. >>


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