Hi cara
Now this is something that makes my mind wander in the way good poems do.
(but 1st. a response to James' comment - I don't know who (dare) say you
can't write a poem about a Dump! dare anyone be as ignorant as that?)

... and the poem cara. I'm there. I can feel what I sense the writer must
feel in the poem... a kind of (I hope it doesn't show) nervousness about
what may happen. That's well caught. (And is it that "chide" is still in
Northern parlance? and possibly, now, isn't a natural-thought-to-use word
elsewhere?)
The one word that I never noticed, until I'd read the poem a few times, was
the word "his" in the phrase "his closing time" in the last line. I always
tend to think of the phrase "closing time" in relation to pubs anyway! But I
sense you're meaning it differently. I'm also interpreting it in a variety
of ways... (I'm guessing that the guy is the one who works at the dump,
that's he's the one responsible for closing it... and then my other
sentiments, and interpretations, are following that assumption).
Bob


>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub:Dramatis Persona
>Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2002 08:40:39 +0000
>
>Hi Cara,
>Who says you can't write a poem about going to the dump. The terse school
>of
>dialogue writing would suggest you rid yourself of "he chides", otherwise
>fine.
>bw
>James
>
>
>>From: cara may <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: New sub:Dramatis Persona
>>Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2002 16:55:11 +0000
>>
>>--              Dramatis Persona
>>
>>
>>
>>        I see the pet dog first
>>        He noses and waddles
>>        Then his master follows
>>        'You've cut it fine again' he chides
>>        I laugh, agree
>>        'He's been chasing rabbits'
>>        he says, as before and before
>>        'Only he's getting too old and too slow
>>        Had a good day though'
>>
>>        I've been here
>>        in this gaunt one-time quarry
>>        on my own, off-loading
>>        garden refuse into the skip
>>        marked 'This one and no other'
>>
>>        I'm back in my car now
>>        my wary eyes upon
>>        this man without a shown self
>>        who may suddenly opt to play
>>        victim, rogue or villain
>>        or who knows which of the Humours
>>        on the stage
>>        of this lonely amphitheatre
>>
>>        I smile and thank
>>        through the open window
>>        slide away
>>        from any possible performance
>>        two minutes to spare
>>        before his closing time
>>
>>
>>
>>cara                                 january 2002
>>
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>bw
>James
>
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