Good morning Terri, how are you, my friend??
Aren't we all like this Terri??
I take your point about the decent into disgust may be overdone but tell me
isn't disgust and shamefulness an element of solo sex which sex with a
Succubus is essentially?? I will take your comments on board nevertheless.
Regards Arthur.
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From: "alderoak" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, November 23, 2002 8:23 AM
Subject: Re: New Sub: Succubus
> Ooh, Arthur, I never knew you were like that. A pity our old friend
Perpetua
> isn't around.
>
> I like the rather paedophilic first stanza. The poem progresses with
> delicious secuction until S5 when she transmogrifies, IMHO too quickly,
into
> something disgusting with claw and maw.
>
> I wonder if it would be more powerful if that stanza were toned down - the
> 'pearly spoor' is squeamy enough to dismay any good Catholic if you ask
me.
>
> Terri )O(
>
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
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> Sent: 23 November 2002 07:42
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> Subject: New Sub: Succubus
>
>
> Succubus
>
> Sometimes she comes to me
> slender and pale as a peeled stick,
> pony-tailed, bobbie-socked
> and bubble-gum-breathed
>
> or sometimes she comes for me
> with tits like turrets,
> buttocks a-quiver
> riding stock slapping a bright boot,
>
> more often I am aware
> of a growing heat behind me,
> perfumed and sensuous.
> I am held in her lithe coils
>
> brought to those moist and musky zones
> to cunningly linger
> between the dizzying white cliffs
> of her thighs.
>
> Dismayed by soft hisses of pleasure.
> I feel her dark wings
> over me; held in crooked grasp;
> dredged by that maw.
>
> She drops me,
> a city sacked
> by an army in triumph,
> pillaged, in ashes.
>
> I watch her leave,
> trailing her pearly spoor behind,
> sliming the moonlit slates
> of neighbouring roofs.
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